Based on Professors remarks, please edit and revise essay previously wrote, Here are the professors remarks –
Hello Student –
The most important suggestion I have is for you to include some statistics of how many deer there were (17?) and now (400?) are per acre in NJ, for instance. Instead of beginning with a quote explaining the need for controlling species, let the reader reach that conclusion by seeing some statistics which clearly demonstrate that some species have become very overpopulated. What about the TX wild boar population? Statistics are powerful and effective in argument essays, especially with your topic.
“. . .hunting is also beneficial. . .” (instead of “a good thing”)
I think you mean “predators” for deer instead of “carnivores”
“deer” is the plural of deer (not “dear”!)
“metropolitans” are people and a metropolis is a capital or chief city of a country; you might want to use “suburbs and urban areas.” I don’t think deer go to New York City.
For in-text citations, simply (Miller 7).
“populace” refers to people. You want to say “the deer population” or “. . .has come from an increase in their numbers.”
When discussing pigs, you want to differentiate pigs kept on farms or being raised as food from those wild boars that are running free and causing great damage. Here again, include some statistics to clarify the situation. Where is this a problem? Texas? NJ?
“A hunter or gatherer” is singular, so match that with “the majority of his/her existence.” (“their” is plural)
“A series of studies” (not researches) has shown. . .
What is a wildlife product? Besides meat, what would be included? I’m confused.
On p. 3: a vast amount of wild animal specialists
What is “transfer of troublesome animals” – “killing” or “eradicating” them?
What is “damage induced by a teleported animal”? What does that mean? How can an animal be teleported?
Conservation specialists can raise public awareness. . . (no need for “assist”)
On p. 4: “. . .a large diversifying diversity”?
“Despite the issue of overhunting being an issue. . . ”
You might want to make a point of separating wild game hunting for sport (shooting elephants, giraffes, etc.) and hunting to maintain a balance of numbers for various species. At times, the paper blends the two.
Do not bold “Works Cited”
Do not justify the right margin – then you can avoid the strange spacing. Follow the examples shown in the Module recordings and in the module information to avoid the problem.
I think the name of one author is: Miller, Stephen Robert (Miller is probably the last name)
Your last source is a .com source (biased/unreliable).
If there is no author, place the title of the article first for that source.