You have the option of revising Paper #1. Read through your original paper carefully to see what changes you can and should make, how you might develop your discussion further, and how you might incorporate my grading suggestions into your revision.
When you submit your revision, please include a brief statement about how you approached the revision, what changes you made, and how you think the paper has changed. Please include the original paper when you submit your revised response, along with the statement about the revising process.
You can combine the revising statement with the revised paper as one document or submit separate files. Make sure you upload your original paper as a separate file as well. Each of these three documents (the revising statement, the revised paper, and the original paper) are needed in order for me to grade your work.
Be sure to label these documents properly and include your name. For example, you could identify your documents in the following manner:
1) Your statement about the changes you made, label “Your Name_Revising Statement”)
2) The revised paper #1, label as “Your Name_Revised Paper #1”
3) The original paper, label as “Your Name_Original Paper #1”
Notes from Prof: You’ve tackled an important topic and provided interesting discussion on race, poverty, and the South. At the same time, you tend to discuss poverty etc. in a broader sense and get away from your original intent and focus about talking about problems in the South. I think if you can keep your focus narrow, say on the rural South or inner city areas that may be affected by poverty, you would have a stronger paper. Also, you make several claims or statements in your paper that really need facts, figures, data etc. to support them. If you read through my comments in the margins, you’ll see those place that need more support. I hope you will consider revising! C+/78