Please re write this essay following the comments at the bottom. To be specific and what two should be compared and contrasted use the powerpoint at the bottom please. Follow the essay structure and all the instructions given.
the essay is supposed to compare and contract two stories — one from each Gospel. This essay compares the entirety of each Gospel, which is too broad. Which chapter or chapters of Luke and which of John are you comparing and contrasting? The instructions are to write about something that was assigned, and you were only assigned certain sections of each Gospel. Also, “heart transformation” is not a phrase that means “change of heart,” if that’s what you mean; there are other sections difficult to understand, and the introductory paragraph needs to focus on which chapters you are comparing and what literary elements; it is a list of statements that do no focus on the specific subject or a thesis. There is no arguable thesis here, just broad topics that no one would disagree with (such as that God and Christ work in unity). Also, try to drain out all of your religion; this is an English paper, so your religious perspective is not important when comparing two stories from two Gospels via literary elements: plot, characters, dialogue, etc.. It’s the same as if you were comparing and contrasting two short stories by other authors.
Essay Structure
The first paragraph should introduce (1) your subjects, your interest in them, and your critical perspective or theme (gender roles, political focus, family dynamics), (2) the sources you will bring into the essay (by name and brief summary of each one’s focus), and why you have found them useful; leading to (3) your thesis at the end of the paragraph, i.e., what is the problem (of perspective of these stories), and what is the solution (one viable perspective, as you see it)? Always introduce scholarly articles by title and author’s full name. After that, only refer to an author by last name. If your essay is written persuasively (logically, reasonably, showing patterns that your readers can identify, and textual evidence to support your claims), your thesis will be credible. THESIS sample: Problem (narrow interpretation of Eve as a character ) + Solution (perspective of Eve in a literary work such as Paradise Lost and/or another work of literature and/or in a contemporary spiritual group today can offer a perspective on Eve that relates better to Christians today).
The inside paragraphs should each focus on one topic (see above). Your task is then to explain why each topic is significant, including a quotation from the scholar and/or the sacred text source (no more than two in each paragraph) supporting your points. Be sure to EXPLAIN and DEFEND why you are including this topic in your essay – it should have a clear connection to your thesis. At the end of each inside paragraph should be a paragraph point, a concluding sentence that establishes the connection of this topic to the thesis and essay overall. Quotations should not be longer than two typed lines, as a general rule (do not INDENT quotations). The components of an inside paragraph are: (1) topic sentence; (2) explanation, examples, and quotations; and (3) a paragraph point.
The last paragraph should include (1) any concluding thoughts you have about this topic that you have explored in your essay. This paragraph should also include (2) a reiteration of your thesis in its fullest, most developed form, as well as (3) your evaluation of studying these ancient stories after your experience of researching and writing this essay. How was your understanding of these and other ancient texts broadened by your research and writing? What can students of the these texts learn from such a literary study?